First I must apologize for my tardiness in reviewing your diary-I’ve been on an utterly self-absorbed and self-indulgent quest for several weeks now. Somehow, I think you’ll understand. Okay!
Style
Less is definitely more in this case. Your writing style is such that I don’t care about any imagery or superfluous garbage to fill in where other parts left off. Plain, simple, and fantastic. If/when you add more entries, I’d like to see a link to your premiere entry as a bio page, but I’m pleased otherwise.
Substance
I love your style. Wordy, intelligent, sarcastic... Your writing left me panting, breathless, and aching for more. I really hope that you’ll proceed with this diary, as I would love to continue on this journey with you. I feel giddy that I’m privy to its inception. I can only imagine the adventures you’ll take us on in the future. Of course, I have to bitch because you only have one entry…more more more!
Suggestions
It’s hard to make suggestions based on only one entry, but I really like what I see so far. I make this criticism a lot, so bear with me…type in upper and lower case! I don’t know if people do it because of aesthetics, or sheer laziness, but it makes the legibility almost nil. If you have lengthy entries in the future, especially on a black background, your readers will thank you. Okay, no more nitpicking!
B+
More entries, uppers and lowers, an A for sure.
