leave me in my bloody mess

Style
OK- I hate, hate, hate the scrolling. We have a similar scroll-in-scroll problem here, but I can�t even see the one you have on the right (which controls the main page). It�s a huge hassle, and totally distracts from your entries. Also, your comments come up on the same page, instead of being a separate popup, which is quite annoying�luckily, it�s also very easy to change. Just go here and follow the instructions�it makes it much easier for people to read and leave comments�you�re paying for �em, you might as well use �em.
Otherwise, though, it�s a really fantastic design�original, clear, all B&W, with one, large (beautiful) image of a flower. I assume you made it yourself, too, so 10,000 points for that. Excellent collection of links on the left, good sized (though a tad too narrow) entry box, perfect font choice� you got it all. Except for those goddamned scrolls! ARGH!
One last thing: it really freaks me out how many reviews you�ve requested� you have more review sites listed than you have entries! Reviews can be a great way to get advice for improvement, but you need to make your diary your own first. Plus, I can tell you in advance�90% of those review sites suck dick, which is why I started Ms. Lovejoy�s in the first place. Hee.

Substance
First of all, you have a very �unique� writing style, with lots of font changes, use of [ ], ///, crossouts and the like. I put unique in quotation marks, though, because it�s actually been done to death by teenagers who just read e.e. cummings and think they can master the style. Luckily, you�re somewhat more advanced than that, and use the font changes to communicate tone and such. The problem is, your font variation has become a crutch. You should be able to convey these things with your diction, and not rely on visual effects. The effects can be striking, but they can also be grating, cloying, and just a tad puerile. Please- keep the look, keep the style, but don�t wholly depend on it to deliver your message�that�s what your words are for.

And the problem with your words is, frankly, that they�re way too vague. You do have a gift, and write in a poetic, musical way that many readers would adore. Unfortunately, unless a reader knows you in real life, they�ll have no idea what you�re talking about (at least) half the time. I LOVE that you listed your (incomplete) 101Things about me- finally, I had some grasp on who I was reading about. (Though #54 is wrong, because actually I�m the sexiest girl on Diaryland�just so ya� know :). I just wish the rest of your entries were so wonderfully descriptive. They needn�t spell everything out, either: this was such a good entry that I didn�t even mind not fully understanding it (though if Y means your puss then I�m sorta grossed out�can�t you think of any better term?!).


Suggestions
Try to remember that a stranger is reading these. You don�t need to be blatant or dumb-down your writing�just be more clear. This means giving details, preferably sensory ones. Describe the way things look, sound, taste, feel� a clear, complete image. You�ve got talent as a writer, and clearly have interesting things to say. But we�re not mindreaders, and need you to give us something to work with.
Use the font tricks sparingly. They�re cool, but they shouldn�t overwhelm your actual writing, which they currently do. Take care of that scroll thing if at all possible- it makes switching entries and reading all the way through very difficult. Otherwise, you�re well on your way to have a great diary�and then you can get all those darn reviews!

B-
You�ve just started- take my advice and you can be a wonderful, unique diarist.

Jessica Lovejoy