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2003-09-08 :: lindseyjtjtk
Lost & Confused

Style
Discovering a site where the positive stylistic attributes outway the negatives is always a pleasant surprise. Your site is one of those. Your template is original, thoughtfully conceived, and organized. There are no broken links, both your global navigation and page-level navigation are logical and clear.

Really, I could find only one fault with the layout: it's cluttered in spots. Particularly the rings page. Webrings are like balsamic vinegar, a little goes a very long way, too much is unpalatable. The quantity of webrings you advertise is overwhelming. I'd be surprised if anyone actually looks through them, let alone clicks on any. Give some thought to narrowing your selection to just a handful of the better rings. Visitors will perceive your selections as more thoughtfully considered. I get the impression you posted every ring you could find pertaining to your chosen topics.

Your links page suffers from being too cluttered too, but mostly by virtue of the graphics interspersed within the lists. Those images seriously detract from the look of the page. Also consider calling out the headers with something other than underlines. Underlined text, as you are no doubt aware, is commonly used to denote a hyperlink. Raising the point size of the headers, unbolding the links and allowing them to be underlined will improve the readability of this page immensely.

Substance
It was when I actually settled in to read your posts the real surprise struck me. Except for the odd grammatical error, word misuse, and spelling error, your writing is quite good. In this sentence:

He said he had extra steaks for supper cause his roommate (William) was going out with some friends, so he invited me.
you misuse cause. You want because there. When read aloud the word is said as though it were a contraction spelled 'cause. I wouldn't bother calling this out if its common appearance weren't so ubiquitous. Also, William doesn't need to be in parentheses, replace them with commas. You did this in a number of places throughout your site. Parentheses are generally used to add supplemental information which would normally not fit into the flow of the paragraph (like an aside). My brother, Sean, who is a reverend, would probably disagree. Savvy?

At times it seemed as though we were hanging out over coffee, chatting. Your tone is familiar, casual, and unpretentious. Your storytelling is even entertaining. Take that as high praise.

Reviewing your site was quite enjoyable until you slagged northerners. For a brief moment I wanted to be insulted, but since I regard southerners with similar distaste, I got over it. You see, I was actually in Asheville last month to see Alison Krause and Union Station at the Biltmore Estate. After taking two days to acclimate to the altitude, the rest of my stay was very pleasant. Now if y'all could do something about the accent. [No, this has nothing to do with your review, I'm just being sociable.]

Suggestions
Clean it up, improve your grammar and spelling, be kind to northerners.

A-
I originally started reviewing your site with this page. You posted twice before I finished editing, so I used your latest post as the entry. This worked out favorably; your writing improved.

Jon